[求助] 麻烦英语达人进来帮忙一下！！~~

zx1238

我将要去XX地铁公司面试，估计都是要用英文口述作简短的自我介绍，但我英文只是SO SO，希望英语达人帮忙看下以下的文意有无语法错误或用词不当的地方，欢迎指正，谢谢！！~~~

Hello,my name is DDX. I am a fresh graduate. The Professional learning is Photoelectric integration.I do for a Technician from Shenzhen Hans Laser for half-year internship.To do the main installation and commissioning for CO2 Laser Marking Machine.I am optimistic character,and have a strong sense of responsibility.

Maybe this job will work very hard,but I am very young,I think I should draw more experience.I do not have any knowledge of metro,But if I was taking,I will study hard,and compensation to these deficiencies..

moddy

以上语句 可以问小学生就可以了。。。。

code_413

fresh graduate... 似乎没听过这说法
I've just graduated from xxx college/university 怎样?

专业: I've majored in xxx / My major was xxx

工作经验:  I've worked for xxx in a half-year internship, my duty was xxx

简短介绍还真简短... 就转到自己的性格是不是太快了?

表明决心: Though this job could mean hard work, I'm young and willing to face any challenge...



祝LZ好运~

捷多

chinglish..................................

nds

地铁公司面试为什么要英文？

帕特莱斯

要多加点口语


HEY~YO~  FXXK ~SHIT~ASSHOLE~什么的 比较生动形象

指着太阳喊日

LZ真是新鲜滋润清爽的犹如刚从树上摘下来的毕业生啊~

应届毕业生虽然也有那种新鲜湿润的用法。。。不过推荐用下面的。。。又不是写小说，直白点好。。。
1. this year's graduates
2. graduating student or pupil
3. this year's graduate

家事不明问百度，外事不明问GOOGLE~

roymuston

lz要是面试的话 没问题 口语是不追求语法效果的 当然 比较明显的语法错误还是要注意的
draw more experience是想表达什么意思呢

fredzhangyu

我不想打击楼主……但是不得不说，找个英语好点的朋友或同学帮你重写吧……很多话不是这样说的，真的。