[求助] 麻烦英语达人进来帮忙一下！！~~

kiyohime

Wrong, very wrong

lws8891

Maybe this job will work very hard,but I am very young,I think I should draw more experience.
感觉太中国化的表达方式……

雁鷲雕狸獅狒

chinglish..................................


good good study  day day up 才行啊 。

zx1238

那改成这样行不行啊？麻烦达人再给意见，谢谢！！~~~~~

Hello,my name is DDX. I am a fresh graduate and my major was Photoelectric integration.I  am different to the other fresh graduate for the reason that I already have abundant working experience in this field.  I had been working for a Technician from Shenzhen Hans Laser  as a intern for half year. My job function was the main installation and commissioning for CO2 Laser Marking Machine.I am optimistic character,and have a strong sense of responsibility.

I recon that this job could be challenging ,but I am young and willing to take any challenge. I will try my very best and I am sure I will be a great asset of the company

遺忘的聲音

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